The morning air at sunrise.
the sky always has more than one shade of blue
The real colors of my cats eyes.
The place music can take you
The dusty textbooks that I never open
The awkwardness of seeing an old friend
how annoying my locker is to open.
The laughter of the children
People are annoyed when they have to move out of the way.
when the weather is bad i feel the same way
By Mike
4 comments:
1. we both have things about the weather.
2. they have lakes and feilds
3. I though there were more in the city but after seeing pictures they have lakes and wide open spaces like us.
4.the words you use made your piece very strong.
5. i like your choices you use and your story.
There is honestly no differences in this piece from anything that we would write.
The similarities that this piece shares with us is that the every day life that a teenager lives. Like a struggle to open a locker, there is always one person who is late to class because their locker was not coperating with them. And they way people act after a long day at school and every little thing annoys them, I know that i have been there many times this year.
This piece helps to overcome some Stereotypes that I have tward your school at the begging of the year because This poem shows many things that we would see on an every day bases.
Borrowed words create creates unified, fluid piece because even though You are just grabbing words out of mid air your mind scambles them to make since in your head even is when your writing it down it still looks confusing. Then when you read over it again it all seems to make since.
I really likes your peice. I really like how you said the real color of my cats eyes because even thought you may have borrowed it it still makes you think about any of your animals and then when you go home you want to take that extra minute to star at them . When you were writing this poem what was your plan going into it. where you just searching for random words or were you looking for phrases.
First of all, thank you for commenting.To Jessica. Yes, I was trying to search for phrases that I could relate to. I also tried to find ending words with the same sounds to make it sorta rhyme. But its interesting because I went to do the same thing with my cousins cat, and cat's eyes are pretty cool. Again thanks for commenting.
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